Guys,

Just a thought:

What if you had someone look at your documents before you send them away? Or help someone else with theirs?

In the spirit of landing a hand how about you copy and paste your cover letter and have other users critique it with the aim of making sure that you cover all the basics of career building.

So, here are the rules:

  • delete any personal information from your cover letter and paste it in the comments field below.
  • If you feel there is something needs improvement in someone’s cover letter PLEASE highlight it politely.

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248 Comments

  • Bhekizitha says:

    Bhekizitha
    Mobile: 00000
    Email:
    Date: 13 September 2018
    To whom it may concern,
    I am writing to express my interest in the position of an internship or a graduate program.
    As a law part time student, currently holding a B.com degree in Accounting highly motivated and dedicated with strong communication and interpersonal skills, I would like to apply for the position available for someone with my qualifications, knowledge and experiences.
    As a student I have been extensively involved in my school community, which has allowed me to develop strong interpersonal skills. My involvement in various events, including participating at church and sports carnivals, has allowed me to work closely with my peers and in improving my communications skills while supporting the school community as a whole.
    These experiences have allowed me to develop strong time management and organisational skills, which I see as being very important when seeking to work in casual employment while continuing to study.
    Personal attributes that I believe make me suitable for this position include:
    • Motivation: Volunteer participation and school results demonstrate high motivation.
    • Customer Service: Assisting with the sale of products at community events has allowed the development of customer service skills.
    • Communication: Acting in the leading roles at church and working as an MC for school events has allowed the development of communication skills.
    I have strong analytical acumen, an excellent writer, a good communicator with strong interpersonal skills. I have excellent spoken and written English and communications skills. I have an interest in business, media, capital markets and the political economy. I am ambitious, self-motivated and have a desire to work hard and learn new experiences.
    My teachers and lectures have commended me for my willingness to participate and my dedication to helping out where possible. I enjoy working with others and believe that my strong communication skills will ensure that I can meet the expectations of any professional role.
    I am aware that you receive a large number of applications for internship program, but I would very much appreciate the opportunity to demonstrate my capabilities to you in person.
    I believe that I have a lot to offer the organisation that will be willing to be exposed to the working enviroment. I am keen to develop my professional skills and look forward to discussing my application with you at an interview. I can be contacted at all times on the details provided above.

    Thanking you in advance for your time
    Bhekizitha

  • Paballo says:

    I am 25 years of age; completing my paralegal studies with the University of South Africa in 2018 (I am studying my last three modules). I hold Computer Application Technology (CAT) certificate, meaning I am computer literate (MS Word, Excel, and MS PowerPoint. I can type 50-55 words per minute. I also hold code 10 drivers license. I learn fast, I work easily with people and working alone. I am self driven, honest, reliable and I am a hard worker. I have also volunteered at the Carletonville Magistrates court as a clerk.
    Please Contact me on:
    Cell phone number:
    e-mail address:
    I would really appreciate been considered.

  • Nomusa says:

    Dear Recruiter Representative

    RE:APPLICATION FOR PRODUCTION INTERN PAPER POSITION
    I am writing in response to the position for Production intern paperposition that was recently advertised in Indeed Job website. I am very interested in this opportunity with Sappi because I believe that my education, qualifications, skills and industrial experience make me a strong candidate for this position.
    I am a very dedicated and optimistic individual who works well under pressure. I am also a very good team player who thinks critically and takes pride in the work at all times and I fully understand the importance of working within a team. I hold a National diploma in Analytical chemistry obtained at Mangosuthu University of Technology in 2018 Furthermore, I have retained for extended contract and I have 13 months in service training work experience obtained at Foskor Acid Division
    I have experience in qualitative and quantitative analysis in analyzing raw material and finished products from variety of sources. I am familiar with the use of modern analytical techniques such as AAS, UV-VIS spectroscopy, ISE, Turbidity, conductivity and PH meter. I am familiar with the procedure of interpreting and recording data as well as presenting the results gained.
    I am confident that I would be an asset to Sappi, I look forward to speaking with you about how I can assist your team achieve its goals.
    Thank you in advance for your consideration.
    I am enclosing a copy of my resume

  • Tarryn says:

    I have a BEd Foundation Phase Degree CPUT, in my 2nd year of permanent teaching.
    Applying to do my Honours Degree 2019 , need help with formatting & wording
    a motivational letter to attach to my application form.
    Please Help !

  • phindile says:

    Good day
    My name is Phindile
    I holds N6 Human Resource Management and is currently acquiring internship with Edcon. In her current role of Human Resources Business Partner of Edgars Connect and CNA.
    I am responsible for partnering with Edgars Connect and CNA Regional Operations Managers in order to implement an HR Agenda that closely support the overall aims and objectives of the Edgars Connect AND CNA Chains. I have the following HR working experience: 1 Year 1 Months.

    I started in April 2017 and my contract is coming to an end in October this year.
    As a professional HR Intern with excellent skills, I am eager to contribute my abilities and experience to your company, given my extensive training and background I believe I can help the company meet its goal of providing only the most accurate and timely information to its client. I am enquire about a vacant permanent position or an internship feel free to contact me to arrange time : 0765480059

    I look forward to hearing from you.

  • Gary says:

    Dear Sir/Madam
    _Application: Work Integrated (P1 And P2): Mechanical Engineering_
    I XXXXXXX have successfully completed my S4 in Mechanical Engineering at Vaal University of Technology on the 12th of December 2015. It is required that one should attain work integrated learning before receiving the national diploma.

    I am diligent worker who has a high work ethic, the eagerness to learn and for that reason I believe I will be a positive addition to your company. I am a team player, I can work under pressure, I have good interpersonal skills and I am reliable. One of the things I hope to achieve is to gather as much experience as possible in the Mechanical Engineering field to improve or invent technology strategies that could be beneficial to the engineering industry.

    I am truly grateful for taking time off your busy schedule to consider my application. A copy of my curriculum vitae which contains all my additional information is attached. Should you wish to interview me, I am available at any time that is convenient for you. I can be reached at 084 574 XXX.

  • Vuyani says:

    Dear Sir/Madam,

    Im a 25 year old industrial engineering professional and I am currently in the job market. I am in possession of a completed National Diploma in industrial engineering together with a techncial certificate in mechanical millwright. I have considered a B.Tech degree in industrial engineering, hopefully I will finish it by June 2018. My B.Tech degree is incoporative of subject courses like project management, Computer Aided drafting, Advanced Computer skills, logistic engineering, Automations,etc.

    I have gained experience in logistics- cargo shipping industry while employed as a trainee industrial engineer at transnet Port terminals (TPT) in Durban container terminal. I was with them for 1 Year, Ive then moved to FMCG industry to gain more work enxperience at Bakers.I was employed as a continous improvement graduate engineer, which durated for a period of 2 Years.

    I hold strong expertise in the divisions of process engineering, Business interlligence, Data analysis, continous improvement, and project management where lean principles and industrial engineering skills are applied diligently. My 3 experience has made me proficient into the usage of software packages like Inventor CAD, Microsoft Package, Visio, Thinkcell, SAP, NAVIS, Revit,Shopware, Sprint ,EtcI thrive in busy environments where I am expected to learn new skills quickly and take direction while taking initiative.

    I am willing to enter into any position that is in line with my career that could possibly add to my experience to braoden up my horizons.

    • Nomayeza says:

      Hello Vuyani.
      I like the format of your letter and I understand the whole cover letter.Thank you for posting it up as an example. It was very useful to me.

  • Siphesihle Madlala says:

    Dear Sir/Madam

    My name is Siphesihle and I am a 19 years old doing his 2nd year in Bsc Information Technology at a private institution. I am a very intelligent young man,creative, ambitious and a hard worker. I am very dedicated and I enjoy being in a successful team. I recently worked on a project at Richfield Graduate Institute of Technology that’s how I was able to fund my 1st year. I really am inspired by Technology that’s why I want to further my knowledge and Studies but I can not afford the whole year, I’m looking for bursaries and financial aids and I believe I will pass very well as in my 1st Semester n 2nd semester and keep on improving.

    Thank You for your time and I would be superbly honoured if this letter reaches you expectations.

    Thank you for consideration. I can be reached on my e-mail and Cell phone

  • kagisho says:

    Dear Sir/Madam
    I am a dynamic … years old young man holder of ………………………………. ……… Enthusiastic and professional individual, who enjoys being part of a successful and productive team. Quick to grasp new ideas and concepts, to develop innovative and creative solutions to problems. Able to work well on my own initiative and can demonstrate the high levels of motivation required to meet the tightest of deadlines. Good time management, friendly and abilities to juggle a number of priorities. My positive attitude helps me in reaching my goals. I like challenges as they allow me to use initiative and creativity.
    I am people’s person, I really enjoy meeting and working with a lot of different people and I am known for being a great listener and clear communicator, whether I am engaging with colleagues or employers. Keen to learn and grow to an expert level as a Human Resource. Prepare and perform all Human Resource Management duties at a professional level by displaying and utilizing my knowledge wonders of full benefit of the employer

    Thanks for your time and considerations I can be reached by phone on …………………… and by email on …………………… Hope to hear from your in due time.

    Kind Regards

  • Lucille says:

    hi my name is Lucille 20 years old unemployed fast learner I have grade 10. i can define myself as a kind,friendly ,down to earth person and I have been dreaming of becoming a chef but couldn’t afford my studies.
    I love cooking and I love to learn new things about cooking I would really love it if I get this opportunity for next year
    thank you!

    yours faithfully
    Lucille

  • Uluncedo Mbukuqu says:

    Good day.
    I am Uluncedo, a graduate in the field of Environmental Management (Btech), Disaster Risk Reduction (NQF Level 4) and a short course in Occupational Health and Safety. I would like to express my interest in the available position for Marine Research Assistant.

    As you will see in my resume, I have dedicated the last few years to achieving the education, skill, experience, and creativity that would qualify me for positions like these. I have good knowledge and experience on GIS; Navigational Plotting; Chart work and phonetic alphabets, coupled with thorough knowledge of Marine Living Resources Act, 1998 (18 of 1998).

    I believe that I would be a good fit and a great asset for the department of Agriculture, Forestry and Fisheries, as I am also an devotee of the departments’ operational efficiency and dynamic environment.

    I think that I could bring a lot to your company with the dedication that I have coupled with the urge to learn and grow within the field of environmental management and nature conservation and Marine Control and Surveilence: Fisheries Protection vessels.

    It’s a directorate that I would like to be a part of, one to which I would gladly devote all of my time and energy. As I am willing to work at sea/ or in the field for extended periods and shifts.

    I would be honored to be a part of such a smart and forward-thinking group of individuals.
    Thank you for your consideration. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

  • Sandra says:

    10-04-2017
    Adress to:
    Hiring Manager
    Port Elizabeth
    6025

    Dear Hiring Manager.

    I hereby apply for Financial Advisor position that was advertised on gumtree.com on the 11th of April 2017.

    Based on the requirements of the position I think I’m the best suitable candidate to be part of your team and I am confident that I can bring high performance to your company.

    I have an ability to grow with a job, handle responsibility and build positive relationship with work colleges. I am someone who knows how to set goals and achieve them, I have a proven record of being able to submit deliver and execute strategies. I am a hard worker who can work well under pressure, always open for new challenges, innovative, self driven person and friendly.

    I have good written and verbal communications skills, computer skills, telecommunications skills, organisational skills, public relations skills and customer service skills gained from local government and private sector.

    I understand the commitment that will be required from me and I promise to deliver as this will be an opportunity for a better future. I hope my application will reach your favourable response.

    Attached please find my CV as requested on the advertised position.

    Kind Regards,

  • Luphumlo says:

    APPLICATION FOR PARALEGAL RD: (REF: BENONIJC/PAR/25/11/2016)
    I am a graduate from the Vaal University of Technology (VUT) and completed Diploma in Legal Assistance NQF level 7. I am currently working as a Recoveries & Salvage intern at Mmela Financial Services. I am highly motivated in pursuing a career as a Paralegal.
    I’m really energetic and a good communicator. I’ve put in long hours and dedication in my work and I’ve achieved amazing results.

    I am eager to learn, share information and also to grow as an individual. I’m seeking a new challenge, to broaden my horizons and to gain a new skill-set – all of which, I see the potential for in this job. I really love working with people where I can use my people skills and industry knowledge to benefit the people working with me, and the company as a whole and I’d like to have an even better understanding of this industry.
    I have been taught the importance of time management in everything that I do. I am energetic and have good communications skills, both verbal and written skills.

    I strive to be the best candidate in all that I undertake and focus on. The commitment and passion is what motivate me in every opportunity that I get. I believe that the knowledge that I managed to get in my studies as well as in the internship will be seen on activities that I perform. I am a person who works more efficiently in both group and on individual activities.

    I am excited about the possibility of joining your () as a Paralegal.

    Thank you for your consideration, and I look forward to hearing from you soon.
    Sincerely,
    …..