Guys,

Just a thought:

What if you had someone look at your documents before you send them away? Or help someone else with theirs?

In the spirit of landing a hand how about you copy and paste your cover letter and have other users critique it with the aim of making sure that you cover all the basics of career building.

So, here are the rules:

  • delete any personal information from your cover letter and paste it in the comments field below.
  • If you feel there is something needs improvement in someone’s cover letter PLEASE highlight it politely.

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  • Uluncedo Mbukuqu says:

    Good day.
    I am Uluncedo, a graduate in the field of Environmental Management (Btech), Disaster Risk Reduction (NQF Level 4) and a short course in Occupational Health and Safety. I would like to express my interest in the available position for Marine Research Assistant.

    As you will see in my resume, I have dedicated the last few years to achieving the education, skill, experience, and creativity that would qualify me for positions like these. I have good knowledge and experience on GIS; Navigational Plotting; Chart work and phonetic alphabets, coupled with thorough knowledge of Marine Living Resources Act, 1998 (18 of 1998).

    I believe that I would be a good fit and a great asset for the department of Agriculture, Forestry and Fisheries, as I am also an devotee of the departments’ operational efficiency and dynamic environment.

    I think that I could bring a lot to your company with the dedication that I have coupled with the urge to learn and grow within the field of environmental management and nature conservation and Marine Control and Surveilence: Fisheries Protection vessels.

    It’s a directorate that I would like to be a part of, one to which I would gladly devote all of my time and energy. As I am willing to work at sea/ or in the field for extended periods and shifts.

    I would be honored to be a part of such a smart and forward-thinking group of individuals.
    Thank you for your consideration. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

  • Sandra says:

    10-04-2017
    Adress to:
    Hiring Manager
    Port Elizabeth
    6025

    Dear Hiring Manager.

    I hereby apply for Financial Advisor position that was advertised on gumtree.com on the 11th of April 2017.

    Based on the requirements of the position I think I’m the best suitable candidate to be part of your team and I am confident that I can bring high performance to your company.

    I have an ability to grow with a job, handle responsibility and build positive relationship with work colleges. I am someone who knows how to set goals and achieve them, I have a proven record of being able to submit deliver and execute strategies. I am a hard worker who can work well under pressure, always open for new challenges, innovative, self driven person and friendly.

    I have good written and verbal communications skills, computer skills, telecommunications skills, organisational skills, public relations skills and customer service skills gained from local government and private sector.

    I understand the commitment that will be required from me and I promise to deliver as this will be an opportunity for a better future. I hope my application will reach your favourable response.

    Attached please find my CV as requested on the advertised position.

    Kind Regards,

  • Luphumlo says:

    APPLICATION FOR PARALEGAL RD: (REF: BENONIJC/PAR/25/11/2016)
    I am a graduate from the Vaal University of Technology (VUT) and completed Diploma in Legal Assistance NQF level 7. I am currently working as a Recoveries & Salvage intern at Mmela Financial Services. I am highly motivated in pursuing a career as a Paralegal.
    I’m really energetic and a good communicator. I’ve put in long hours and dedication in my work and I’ve achieved amazing results.

    I am eager to learn, share information and also to grow as an individual. I’m seeking a new challenge, to broaden my horizons and to gain a new skill-set – all of which, I see the potential for in this job. I really love working with people where I can use my people skills and industry knowledge to benefit the people working with me, and the company as a whole and I’d like to have an even better understanding of this industry.
    I have been taught the importance of time management in everything that I do. I am energetic and have good communications skills, both verbal and written skills.

    I strive to be the best candidate in all that I undertake and focus on. The commitment and passion is what motivate me in every opportunity that I get. I believe that the knowledge that I managed to get in my studies as well as in the internship will be seen on activities that I perform. I am a person who works more efficiently in both group and on individual activities.

    I am excited about the possibility of joining your () as a Paralegal.

    Thank you for your consideration, and I look forward to hearing from you soon.
    Sincerely,
    …..